two poems

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i really enjoy getting ideas/suggestions on my poems. i am in a creative writing class and so i expecially want my work reviewed before i submit it. these two poems that i have writter were done very quickly (although I don't know if I should point that out) and they haven't been revised as of yet. lemme know what you guys think of one or both! thank you!!!

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